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Leave me alone!
Is that so hard to do?!
You don’t care about my feelings,
They are nothing to you!

What have I done wrong?
I just want you to leave,
You hurt me more and more,
So how can I believe?

Your words mean nothing,
Your apologies are fake,
Just stay away from me!
How much pain can I take?!

You got what you wanted,
But what about me?
I only want one thing,
I want to be free!

I can’t take it anymore!
Every night and day,
You just refuse to leave,
So at least stay away!
Some people just don't want to leave.
This is based on my friend's story, not mine.
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SamChanandJasonKun Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
A true masterpiece. 

Though, not one of a story, but of life. Real life. Real things. Real problems. 

You are truly a genius to have captured human emotion in such a raw form.
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Delta565 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Even though I feel like this is quite the exaggeration to a fairly simple poem, which holds nothing but alliteration, I must thank you for your kind words, and your direct understanding of the poem.

Psychological analysis being my, probably, biggest inspiration of writing, most of my poetry comes from a direct place of the human mind, mine or otherwise someone else's, at least my personal interpretation of it, emotion, thoughts and behavior and reaction.

I can't stand enough how much I appreciate your comment, thank you very much, and I hope you have a great day.
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SamChanandJasonKun Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't underrate your own work though! 

That's amazing. I hope you keep on writing with this amazing talent. 

:D I believe this won't be fair unless I say that I appreciate your comment as well—for saying you appreciated my feedback. So, thanks for replying to my comment, you're very, very welcome, and have an awesome day as well. 
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adrianarosabell Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
cool poem and it's true some people sometimes want to help you but instead they hurt you and you tell them you want to be lone and they don't go.
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And it goes either of two ways:
We don't have enough courage or we'll feel bad if we tell them to go away,
Or we tell them to go away and they stay. 

That's what this poem was made for. To just show it to those people.
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adrianarosabell Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
yeah, I hope your poem taught that to those people, they sure can get annoying sometimes thinking they're right 
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GreenGoblin73 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes.
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Delta565 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes.
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DeannasurusREX Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
I feel this way about a lot of people.
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demi-lune4 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Student Filmographer
I was singing your poem while I was reading it.
My voice was like crap, but your text is beautiful! :iconthefeelsplz:
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Delta565 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can understand, I like singing my poetry even though I sound like a dead raven.

Glad you liked it. XD
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Eredev Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
I got no clue why it took me so long to get here... :confused: I must have gotten lost on the road...

Anyway... here I am :D Got nothing smart to say but I like it :D
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Delta565 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm guessing I'm missing a pun here but I'll just reply politely and say thank while acting like I understood the pun.

Haha, yeah, I get it, thank you anyway. ^^
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Eredev Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
There is a pun somewhere :confused: where could it be... :iconhiderockplz:
:D:D:D:D
you're welcome :)
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A-Twisted-Fairytale Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
truer words never spoken.
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Agreed.
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wdnest Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Professional Writer
[link] Featured.
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I'm speechless!
I don't know what I did to deserve such a honor,
But I'll accept it anyway, thank you very much! ^^
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very good written. You have kept the rhyming pattern through all the stanzas. It definitely shows someone's feelings in trouble of being pressed and deprived of his/her freedom. So, one person hurts another one but does not want to leave?
Probably this might be a psychic problem. Perhaps the one that does not leave is afraid of losing someone. That is why this person is hanging on the other one like a bur. Could be a reason. Or a possession maniac. The one that wants the freedom is being "captured" by the other one that wants to possess everything/everyone without further thoughts. Could be another reason.
But I do not know the background and I do not know if that is what you ask for people who should read this ;)

Nevertheless give my hugs to your friend :hug:
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Firstly, I would like to say I just admire your way of writing, even a simple comment.
Secondly, the one who hurts more likely has an obsession to the person who wants to be free, he just never gives up, and on the way hurts him greatly.

Sadly, it's friends, and not just one, but I'll be sure to sends them a lot of hugs~ ^^
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome.
If you would like to have some reads, critiques or comments on your works, please let me know :)
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll gladly ask whenever it is necessary. ^^
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SunsetSprite Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, does she have boy trouble?
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
More like he has girl trouble, but not the kind you would expect.
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SunsetSprite Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, poor girl. Are they together or something?
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm talking about a guy, my best friend is a guy. ._.
And secondly, no, she's just someone that's annoying him and refusing to leave.
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SunsetSprite Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh! I'm sorry, really!
So, she's a stalker?
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
To be honest, possibly.
Everything he does she just HAS to get involved in it even though it's not her business, she tries to talk to him all the time even though he doesn't want to (And I can understand why), she's a leach on his back.
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SunsetSprite Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, that's annoying. I hope she doesn't stay like that for long...Hang on, how long has she being doing this to him? :?
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
About two months I think.
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IokoThePanda Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I hope your friend feels better....
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
He will feel better, as long as some people stay away from him.
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IokoThePanda Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh.... okay c:
then I hope that they stay away...
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hope so as well.
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IokoThePanda Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
haha :iconbigdsmallblushplz:
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Nicolaspok Featured By Owner May 17, 2013
Very well written !
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Delta565 Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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